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To my ESL students,
===I guess by now you should have had a fair understanding of how to edit the blog. Based on the trial we did, I come up with some rules that we all are going to obey. Otherwise, you will be no longer included in this group. Also, it will affect your term report as well. Remember, this is not a FACEBOOK! This is the place where you are doing your school work while having fun. by Ms Chen===

Rule 1 Do not delete or change other people's writing. Rule 2 Whenever you make a comment or write something, please mention your name. For example, "I like your writing. It's very cool! by Ms Chen" Rule 3 Always write in formal written form with correct grammar, punctuation, captial letter and so on. Rule 4 Whenever you are given a task to finish by using wikispaces, you need to finish on time because this is your homework.

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Some of these websites, we have used in the classroom but some you haven't seen them. They are all useful and practical to improve your story writing skills. Therefore, have a look at the web pages and even take some notes down. Remember! You need to be ready for the assessment task on Thursday, this week ! By Ms Chen 22/08/11 =====

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1.[|Story Map] Use this online tool to analyze the character, conflict, and setting of a picture book.=====

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2. [|Plot Diagram] Use this online tool to plan the plot of their children's picture book=====

= Draft for Assessment Task: Story Telling Due: Lesson 2, Week 6 = = Homework for the long weekend: find mistakes from other people's writing by highlighting the erros = Claudia and her brother Jack Written by Laurent Claudia and Jack were living with their parents, having good health. They were always having fun with their parents like other children.

One morning, both of their parents got sick. In couple weeks their parents passed away and two kids became orphans without hope.

Claudia and Jack started struggling with their life. There was nobody to look after them. They were asked to leave school because they had no money to pay for schooling. They cried but nobody could hear their sorrows and needs.

The owner of their house kicked them out because they could not afford the rent. “Where are we going?” ask Jack. “We are going to live under the bridge,” replied his sister, Claudia. There was no food, no drink under the bridge. “I’m only hearing the sound of the frogs around us,” said Jack.

Few days ago, a strange man pass over the bridge and saw them crying. He was very sad, “What are you doing there?” asked the strange man. “We don’t have anywhere to go,” answered the two siblings. That guy decided to take them to his family and live with them forever. Claudia and her brother Jack began having fun like before with their parents. What a nice strange man!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Jealousy 1/09/2011 “Jasmine is my best friend” said Tesh when yelling at her mum on a Monday morning, they had been fighting for days Tesh’s mum said Jasmine was a bad influence on Tesh, but Tesh thought different.

That day went on forever it felt like it would never end, Tesh came home crying her face was strawberry red, “what’s wrong Tasha what happened” yelled Cassi Tesh’s younger sister “are you ok Tesh.” I pushed her away and ran upstairs to my room and locked my door from the inside.

I didn’t get up for school that morning I was to upset I started to think, was mum right was jasmine a bad influence on me I didn’t even know any more. I just went back to bed, mum didn’t even wake me up for school that morning she just left breakfast at the door.

<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Wednesday finally came mum dropped me off that day, I was wishing she wouldn’t talk but the she started “so what happened the other day.” I don’t know mum I really don’t, jasmine was meant to be my best friend but she’s not, she told me I was a cow then tipped a slushy on me I hate her I really do. I should of just believed you “so are you going to talk to her” in anger I said no, but mum was right I had to find out what was wrong.

<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">At lunch time that day I took a deep breath and walk over to jasmine, “so what was that all about” <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">I asked ready to hit her why would you do that? Do you hate me? No I love you your my best friend why would I hate you. In anger I hit her in the head and she fell to the ground I felt amazing, payback felt great.

<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">In lesson six that day I waited for someone to come and get me, finally Mrs Caroline came “can I please see Tesh” sure, I got up and walk over. We waited in the office for our parents, tesh why would you do that to your best friend “she started it” I yelled, she called me a cow and tipped a slushy over my head. Jasmine what happened she’s right I started it but she didn’t have to hit me.

<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">30 minutes went by very slowly but mum finally came so did jasmines dad, “so what’s the punishment “asked mum they have to apologise and they will be suspended for three days. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">“Sorry I was jealous of you” said jasmine “sorry I was better then you” I replied.

<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Jasmine and I never became friends again but I learnt to always listen to my mum.

<span style="color: #7030a0; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 24px;">By Achiech nhail

<span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">The Turtle and the Rabbit

One day, while Rabbit is walking in the forest, he met Turtle. Due to slow walking of the turtle, Rabbit laughed so loud. "Your feet are so short, and very slow to walk," Rabbit said and followed that of crunchy laugh. The Turtle was extremely insulted that Rabbit said. To prove that’s wrong, Turtle challenge the Rabbit. "That I may walk slowly but my solid body, not losing me," Turtle said proudly. The Rabbit only laughed at him. "Your excited turtle, you might just embarrass when you lose," said Rabbit. "To see who is really great and fast, we race towards to the mountain of Everest.

The Rabbit just laugh to the Turtle challenge. So Rabbit called all his friends to watch the race. The race was about to start, they surrounded of their animal friends. The monkeys choose for the start of the competition. "Are you ready,” monkey said. Respond turtle and rabbit. "We’re ready". "One Two Three, monkey said. Then the two cross the start line. Rabbit hop, quick as he can. Almost a minute Rabbit is in the half way of the race. Rabbit turned, he saw far apart to turtle. While turtle is continuing his slow walking, but turtle is so determined to win the race.

Meanwhile, Rabbit was almost boring waiting to see turtle. Due to great trust of Rabbit to himself, he knew his ability to run fast, so he decided to get sleep under the tree in the middle of the mountain. While waiting to Turtle.

Turtle continued slow walking uphill, until he reached the middle of the mountain, then he saw Rabbit, he was asleep and snoring. He passed Rabbit and went on walking until he reached the border of the finish line. Later on Rabbit was awake so he decided to finish the race, but he saw turtle reached the finish line.

<span style="font-family: 'calibri','sans-serif'; font-size: 15px;">After that race, Rabbit respected Turtle all the time.

by: Remar


 * **<span style="font-family: 'Adobe Myungjo Std M','serif'; font-size: 16px;">the great FRIENDS KECH and achiech ** ||

<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Once upon a time there were two great friends, kech and achiech. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">They been friends since they were born, kech and achiech have been playing, hang around, they do anything no matter what happen or what they have been told by their parents the go school together and come back together.

<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">On Monday a new girl called Ashley came to school, Ashley was beautiful and rich that everyone wants to be friend with her. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Kech and Ashley started talking and became and they starting ignoring her former best friend Achiech. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Achiech starting getting jealous of Ashley, so she started planning what to do to split their friendship with kech so that she can be friends with her. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">After a month, Achiech started pranking Ashley which she didn’t like day by day Achiech do something different and Ashley was sick and tired of it so they starting fighting.

<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">After the day they had a fight, Ashley went to kech’s house and said we are over because of your old friend, she did beat me yesterday because of you then Ashley left kech’s’ house. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">The next day at school, Ashley didn’t hang out with kech and more so kech has no one to hang out with so she went to Achiech gave her an apology and they finally went back together by kech

<span style="font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Once upon a time, there was a boy and a girl. The boy was a hooligan, and the girl was the top student in her school. They loved each other a lot. However the girls’ parents didn’t like the boy and they tried everything to stop them from being together, but nothing could separate them. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">One night, the boy invited the girl to go for a ride, but actually the boy and his friend had secretly planned to celebrate the birth day for the girl. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">The boy and the girl were speeding on the street. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">“Nothing can stop us from being together!” the girl who was sitting on the back of the motorbike yelled. “YES! Nothing” the boy yelled with the girl. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">“You need to slow down a little, because I’m scared.” said the girl on the back seat. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">"Come on, it’s fun!” "Please, it's so scary." <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">The boy heard the begging from the girl and tried to slow down a bit, but the brake didn’t work. At the time he noticed that the brakes were broken, but he didn't want to let the girl know, because he knew that the girl would be scared. Boy then said: “Say that you love me then I will slow it down." the girl answered, "Fine! I love you. Can you slow down now?" <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">The boy though a while and said, “Yeah, after you give me a big hug." the girl gave him a big hug. "Now can you slow down?" "Yeah, I will after you take off my helmet and put it on? It’s uncomfortable and it's bothering me while I drive." The boy answered with smile. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">The girl followed what exactly the boy said and put on the helmet. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">The next day, there was news in the newspaper saying that a motorcycle had crashed into a building because its brakes were broken. There were two people on the motorcycle, one of them died, and the other had survived. <span style="color: #4e4e4e; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Reference <span style="font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">[] google image, used on 31/08/2011 <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">[] google image, used on 31/08/2011 <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">[] google image, used on 31/08/2011
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 * <span style="color: #4e4e4e; font-family: 'Verdana','sans-serif'; font-size: 14px;">Bleeding love **

A Fish and a cat By jingjing In the morning. “I want to get out of here” Little fish was tired of the pond. But little fish was failed. "Can I help you? You might enjoy the nice water in the stream over there. You can see the sea just the hill.” A big cat said. "Sea, an old fish told me a story of the sea, the sea is very wide and beautiful. “Little fish said. “Can you take me there ? A virtuous cat!" “Yes," said big cat. Then big cat put a bag into water. Then little fish swam into the bag. A little fish is very happy, because he will be sea wide of sea. Big cat ran over the hill and into a house. Little fish looked around and asked “ is the sea in here?" “You trip over,” Big cat said. “Is ...is this your pined?" Little fish asked. “No, it is my kitchen”. Big cat said, “And I will cook you, will eat you." Big cat, stop please. “Little fish cried. “Just look at me. I am all bone. I am not good to eat. But I know a big big fish....so big that he would take up this house.” Big cat looked at little fish." where is this big fish?" He asked, he like relish meal. "If you take me back .I will get him for you." little fish was tingling with excitement. "How can you get him for me ? Big cat asked. "Do you have some ketchup?" Little fish asked." He likes ketchup. Take me back. Bring a string and some ketchup, and I will do it all for you. Big cat took bag with little fish and a bag with the ketchup and ran back to the pond.” <span style="font-family: '宋体'; font-size: 15px;">Little fish swam out of the bag. He <span style="font-family: '宋体'; font-size: 15px;"> took the string and swan with it, “big <span style="font-family: '宋体'; font-size: 15px;"> cat little fish called. “Take <span style="font-family: '宋体'; font-size: 15px;"> it up ! <span style="font-family: '宋体'; font-size: 15px;"> “ Big cat pulled on the string. He pulled a broken out of the water. Big cat was so angry. He hopped up and down  .  Little fish swam around the pond with a smile. “It was just a fish story," little fish said .Then big cat cried out. “Oh! Just a fish story for a big cat!”

Fox Adventures -Selina

<span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%; text-align: justify;">Once upon a time, there was a little fox, named Betty. One day, her mother took a basket of cakes to her and said : “ Betty, grandma now is sick, if she ate these cakes, she will be better. I don't have time to go to her house, can you help mum to take these cakes to grandma's house?" "Yes mum, I can do that,” Betty said. Then she took the basket, and went to her grandma's house.

<span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%; text-align: justify;">Betty picks the wild flowers and caught butterflies while she was walking. She was happy and cheerful, but in a short while she saw a tiger coming toward her. She was very frightened and so she ran toward the road. But unfortunately, she trod over piece of wood which was lying on the ground.

<span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%; text-align: justify;">When she woke up, she saw a huge black bear " Don't be afraid. My name is Coke and this is my house.” The black bear said. “I’ve seen a tiger chasing after you, and I drove the tiger away,” Coke explains, with a smile on his face. “Oh! Thank you, Coke” Betty said. Then Coke asked Betty "Why are you walking by yourself on the road? Don’t you know whether there are many tigers on this road?” “My grandma is sick and my mum asks me to take these cakes to her. “Betty said. “Where is your grandma living?" Coke asked. Betty forgot where her grandma lives and she starts to cry.

<span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%; text-align: justify;">Coke saw Betty crying, thus he said to her " Don't worried, I will help you to find your grandmother. Let's ask the bird!" Coke walked toward the window and then came a sparrow. Coke told Betty to describe how her grandma house looks like to the sparrows. She describes her grandma’s house and then the sparrow said “I know where it is. I always play near that house with my friends. I can take you there."

<span style="display: block; font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%; text-align: justify;">Coke thought Betty may have another risk again. So he protected her by walking with her to her grandma's house. Suddenly, Betty saw her grandma's house. Then she said words of thank you to Coke and the sparrow. She gave the basket of cakes to her grandma and Betty’s grandma ate the cakes and then her illness is cured.

Monkey went to school Jianchai Huang The morning sun father slowly climbed up the Hill, and the sun shon through into monkey’s house.

Jack and Tomwere very well behaved, they woke up bythemselves and were ready for breakfast. “Today is a special day,” Jack said, Tom and Rachel are going to school.

But only Rachel was still on her bed sleeping. “Rachel, wake up!" Her mum called. But she just kept sleeping even though her mum was calling her loudly.

"Don't you wantgo to the school? The father came and asked. he patted Rachel's the little red small brains and said: "Rachel, why not get up? " "I don't school, because cousin says school is not fun, you cannot play toy in class and you cannot speak."Rachel said it.

"haven't you always dream to become a doctor? If you don't go to school, you won’t have knowledge so you can't bea doctor, love learning is the best way to achieve you dreams.

Then Rachelthought for few seconds and said "I want to go to school.”

Rachel woke up and had her breakfast and went to the school with jack and Tom.

<span style="font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">Henrietta and the Nightmare -By Li Ru

<span style="display: block; font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; text-align: left;">Once upon a time, there was a little girl, who named Henrietta. She lived with her cousin--Louis. Henrietta has a brother, but he went to traveled. When he was leaving, he gave a book to Henrietta. He said that book will help Henrietta and Louis when they needhelp. One night, when Henrietta was going to sleep, she heard a funny noise from outside of the window. Then she decided to see what that noise is. Henrietta chased the noise to the forest. When she was thinking that she's lost, the noise suddenly stopped. The forest was dark and quiet. Henrietta heard a sound of someone’s footsteps. She felt very scared, then she hid behind a tree. “Are you there? Henrietta? ” A familiar voice said. “I’m here, Louis.” Henrietta went to the noise. “Don’t walk to him, Henrietta!” Another Louis appeared. Henrietta got confused, “Why there are two Louis?” Louis who just came said,"I'm Louis, his not." Another Louis made a strange giggling. "No, I'm Louis. Come to me, Henrietta." "No, you're not Louis."Henrietta shaken her head, "Who are you?" "Who am I?" the boy giggled, then he turned to a odd appearance."I'm the nightmare.""Run!"Louis held Henrietta's hand, tried to ran out of the forest. "You can't run away, where ever you run to, I will find you." The nightmare just said, then he suddenly appear front of Henrietta and Louis. "Did you bring the book? That your brother gave you." Louis said. "Yes, I did." Henrietta took out the book from her bag. Then she realized the book was emitting a weak light. Henrietta opened the book, start to read the book."The fairy of the wind, appear here, I commend you obey my words. The wind fairy--Sylph!" After a wind blow, the wind fairy appeared. "My lord, I will give you my power when you need me."Sylph said. Henrietta commanded, "Sylph, please defeat the nightmare." Then Sylph made a strong wind to blow away the nightmare. After the nightmare is gone, the wind fairy disappeared. The night was over, the sun rise up from the horizon line. Henrietta and Louis went home. And they lived happily togetther.

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Achiech starting getting jealous of Ashley, so she started planning what to do to split their friendship with kech so that she can be friends with her. ======

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">After a month, Achiech started pranking Ashley which she didn’t like day by day Achiech do something different and Ashley was sick and tired of it so they starting fighting. ======

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">After the day they had a fight, Ashley went to kech’s house and said we are over because of your old friend, she did beat me yesterday because of you then Ashley left kech’s’ house. ======

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">The next day at school, Ashley didn’t hang out with kech and more so kech has no one to hang out with so she went to Achiech gave her an apology and they finally went back together and became friends again. ======

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Tom's friends by Xiumin
<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">After school every day, Tom went out to play with his friend. His friend was all colors and shape, but.... PAGE2

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">They only always played with the fox looked like them. "I want we could all play together.” Thought tom. PAGE3

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">First tom ran to play do not fall the carrot with the black foxes.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Tom did not fall the carrot once, when even not he hopped on one leg.

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Next tom played swimming with the white foxes. "Swam, swam and away!' chanted tom's "but be careful drowned."

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Then tom played skip-whistle-stop with the grey and brown foxes.

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">On next day afternoon, a little foxes stand under a tree. He watched all the foxes having amuse and want that he join in together, but he is new and he did not knowledge anybody, didn't know their games.

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">When tom saw a new fox, he want walk oven. "Hi, I am tom. What you name, can you tell me?" he asked. "Jon" said the new fox. "Come and play together,” said tom. "i would like to, but i don't how to play your games,” said Jon. "Dot not worries, I will teach you." said tom.

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Tom showed Jon do not fall the carrot, "do you understand?" said tom. "yes, I know, it's very cool." said Jon. Then it was Jon's turn. He put the carrot on his head. "See, it's very easy!" said tom.

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">They became to friend because they play together every day.

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<span style="color: #444444; font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">Wildlife’s huge Migrations <span style="color: #444444; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">By Qixun H <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">The all of the wild animals in earth were met each other again, the premier was tiger. There were about thirty million of wild animals coming in that day……

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“Let’s start our meeting,” tiger said it sadly.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“Ok, fellows, today we are here to hold once in every hundred year’s ‘Wild Animal Council meeting’,” tiger said, “in hundred days, our friends were died; some of the species were extinct, and these are cause by human’s destructions. And we must find way to deal with them.”

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“Kill all of them!” a cheetah said angrily.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“No, the Earth still needs them to develop,” said tiger.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">A monkey stand out and said, “we need to escape here, our purpose is let human know that how important we are!” <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“Where we can go?” said bear, “they will find us easily.” <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“Well, there is only one place that can safe us, which is alien’s huge space ship,” tiger finally said out. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“But that is alien’s place,” a deer said. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“My opinion is that if aliens know our condition is so horrible, they may will let us live with them,” tiger answered. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“How can we get there?” an elephant knows that the only way go to alien place must cross the huge ocean, so he point out this questions. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“We can riding on whale’s back, and with small one can riding on dolphin and shark’s back,” tiger answered. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">The premier let animals rest few days, prepare some food, then they leave in night, because it is more safety. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">Thirty million wild animals finally arrived the destination, but the big winds were stopping them moving forward. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“Human’s were destructions our place, for survive so we come here, please let us live here!” Tiger knew that the winds were created by alien, so he shouted out. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">After few second, the huge winds stopped, after the sounds were coming, “animals, we are sympathy your plight, and we agree that you can live here whatever you want.” <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">“Great,” the animals cheers. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px;">After that, there were no wild animals in every single wild places in Earth……. With out animals, Earth cried.

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<span style="color: #5f99f7; display: block; font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%; text-align: center;">Just a dream by Cassie

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg1 　A bright and sunny day,with the pure and fresh air .I was lying down on the grass to enjoy the gift of nature, but unconsciously slowly in to dreamland …

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg2 A dark cloud floated slowly, bit by bit cover the warm sunshine. I was feeling a bit cold, fog filled scattered over hill and dale.

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg3 I opened my eye, slowly moved ahead. My finger tip was suddenly throe, original I was walked into a purple rosebush. And now my heart felled bit fear.

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg4 Abrupt, one freeze little hand were holding and pulling my arm. I didn’t screaming, but in my heart was scared half to death.

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg5 “Flow me”A vague voice was floating in my ear. I have no chance to flows by that little freeze hand and running forward in the rosebush.

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg6 My spotlessly white skirt was out of sharp by the flowering branch. My feet were full of soil, and the potpourrito accompany the fog lets me choke.

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg7 The rosebush seem like never have the end, I was scared and feel cold, no chanced by flowing this freezes hand.

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg8 Finally, I walked out the rosebush and the fog was bit thin. I fuzzy seen a 16 year’s old boy was standing near me.

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg9 He turned over to me and blinked his angelical eyes like a pair of fog, but when I was fascinated with him but he is gradually disappears in my side.

<span style="color: #5f99f7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Pg10 It was just a dream; I wake up from the grass where I sleep in and stand up walking home.

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Mouse and cat By Hesen Z <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">In the some house, have a mouse and cat. The mouse name is jerry; cat is tom that is very strange. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">They are good friend, tom never to eat mouse, jerry never afraid the cat. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Someday, jerry told to tom, we can’t always stay in the village, need go to the city. Because there is very pretty and beautiful place and food is perfect. Tom is readily agreed; take the luggage with jerry to the city. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">They are for the city and saw city is lively. They are walked in the crowed, suddenly, one foot down. They escaped into a hole, and climbed out along the hole. That is a big apartment, have fragrant food on the table. They are run to table and eat, someone took a stick approach them. Then raised his stick to hit them, tom leg is wounded. Escaped into hole again. Tom told to jerry, although city is beautiful, food is perfect, but had to life of escaped of everyday. Jerry sad and regret should not be come to city. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%;">Next day, tom escorted jerry returned to village.

<span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial Black','sans-serif'; font-size: 16px;">The Ghost Doll By Eric Bao <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 16px;">It was a cold afternoon and the sky started to get dark. Michael and his partner Paris wanted to go the nearest village to stay for a night.

While they were looking for a village, Paris saw a beautiful doll left on the ground. She quickly picked up the doll and said “What a nice doll, I am going to keep it for sure.” “Don’t picking up strange things from the ground, chuck it away!” Michael said to Paris, but she just ignored him.

After a while, they found a village, but the village is very strange. They only saw few people living in that village. “Excuse me sir, do you know where this place is?” Michael asked one of the person in the village. The man sigh for a while and said in a deep voice “Today’s moon is rounder than yesterday. Ha-ha…” His laugh scared away Michael and Paris. “I think tonight we should find a place for camp,” Paris said to Michael. Just then, they saw another man standing far away. Michael ran up to him and asked “Excuse me sir, do you know where this place is?” “Well this is “The Lost Land”,” the man answered. “It seems you are a traveller, let me remind you, don’t ever pick strange things up from the ground, otherwise you will end up like me. “Like you? What is the matter with you?” Michael asked curiously. “Yes like me, being a dead man,” the man answered. Michael doesn’t believe what the man told him. “Let’s sleep, we have to keep on moving tomorrow.” Paris said to Michael.

In the midnight Paris suddenly woke up, she found out herself was in a coffin. Skulls and dead bodies were everywhere on the ground. Paris was so scare, she quickly ran out from where she was. Suddenly the doll that Paris has had turns into a scary ghost, chasing behind her. The ghost chased Paris to the top of the mountain and then pushed her down to the bottom.

The next morning Michael woke up, he found out that Paris is missing. He then went to the village looking for Paris, but no one is there. Suddenly a woman walked past, she seems she is lost. Michael went up to her and asked “Have you seen a woman before?” “No I haven’t, the woman responded, “I am also looking for my friend, he name is called Michael, have you seen him?”

<span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 120%; text-align: center;">The man and his son -By一jim <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">Once upon a time, there was a man who always came home very late, and his 5 years old son waiting for him at home every night.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">One night the man came back, his son ask him “daddy, can I ask you a question?” “Yes, sure,” the man replied. “How much you get pay for an hour?” the man’s son asks. “Why do you want to know? That none of your business,” the man said. “Just tell me dad, I want to know,” the man’s son asks. “I get 20 dollar for an hour,” the man replied. And then the son asks his father to give him 10 dollar. The man gets very angry and tells his son to get back to his room.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">The little boy quietly went to his room and shut the door. After about an hour, the man had calmed down, and started to think, maybe there was something he really wants buy with that $10 and, he really didn’t ask for money very often.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">Then the men went to the boy’s room, and open the door and give him 10 dollar. Then the boy gets another 10 dollar out under his pillow. “You already have 10 dollars, why do you ask for another 10 dollar?” the man asks. “Because I don't have enough but now I do,” the boy replies. “Dad, I have 20 dollars now. Can but an hour of your time? Can you please come home earlier tomorrow? I want to have dinner with you.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">From that night on, the man come home very early every day have dinner with his son

<span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; text-align: left;">Instruction for Lesson 1 & 2, Thursday, 11/08/11 <span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; text-align: left;">1. A worksheet of quotation mark was given on Tuesday to finish. If you haven't finished, you should complete it by the end of this double lesson. <span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; text-align: left;">2.I have chosen the best 4 paragraphs (by Cassie, Qixun, Eric,Ramer) but there are still many mistakes in them.You need to log on to the blog and correct those mistakes for all 4 paragraphs <span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; text-align: left;">and write down whose paragraph is the best. "For example, Ms Chen gives 1 vote for Steven." <span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;"> 3. If you finish the first 2 tasks and get checked by the relief teacher, you can go to the BBS Skillswise website, __[]__ <span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; text-align: left;">and read through the section of __Types of Text__ then complete the exercises and game.You find the fact sheets are helpful, print them out. <span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; text-align: left;"> __4, At the beginning of lesson 2, relief teacher will count the votes and find out whose 3__ __rd__ __paragraph will be the official 3__ __rd__ __paragraph of our story so make the decision quick!__ <span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; text-align: left;">__Homework for today:__ <span style="display: block; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; text-align: left;">__Start writing the 4th paragraph of our story. People who haven't finished the 3rd para, it's your last chance!!__

Mr Rabbit Written by Pascal
There was a royal of Animals where an elephant was the king of the forest. Mr Rabbit was one the servant of the king Elephant. Rabbit was treated very well in the royal of elephant because of his courtesy to the king. Other animals hated the rabbit because he was the spy of the king, his job was to tell the king other animals’ mistakes. Mr Rabbit was scared because other animals did not like him. He thought that maybe he will be killed by his neighbours. Animals that hated the rabbit met to discuss how they will kill him. "I'm very sure we will tear him into pieces,” said the hyena. Two days later, six animals that were chosen in the meeting to kill the rabbit came to his house and started to destroy his house in order to get inside. The rabbit recognised that they came to kill him, passed through the spyhole one the back of his house and ran away. Next morning Mr Rabbit was sitting under the tree, and then he saw the king walking around his land, He went closer and said,” Good morning, you’re Majesty.“ “Yes, good morning” replied the king. “What are you doing here? “asked Elephant The following day, the king invited all animals to his house. In the meeting, the rabbit showed the king all the six animals. The king killed them in the eyes of all animals and the king nominated the rabbit as the second person after him.

= A Missing Cat = ===The owner of a missing cat is asking for help. “My baby has been missing for over a month now, and I want him back so badly,” said Mrs. Brown, a 56-year-old woman. Mrs. Brown lives by herself in a trailer park near the Blue Lake. She said that Rocky, her 7-year-old cat, didn’t come home for dinner more than a month ago. The next morning he didn’t appear for breakfast either. After Rocky missed an extra-special lunch, she called the police. (from [|Short Stories and Exercises for ESL Learners])===

=== After a while the police came. "Have you found him? Have you found my baby yet?" Mrs. Brown asked with anxiety ridden. "Mrs. Brown, please calm down. We can’t look for your cat until you tell us what he looks like," the policeman said sympathetically. "Rocky has a pair of bright tempting blue eyes just like the lake, and spotless white fur likes snow on a winter morning. His favorite’s food is bright shining fish and sweet cat cookies. Please help me to find him. I miss him so much!” Mrs. Brown carried on “Maybe my baby now is walking along the dark street. He probably has to curl up his body to keep warm.” “Maybe he is searching for food in those smelly garbage bins or is stealing food from people's kitchen.” Mrs. Brown sighed deeply after muttering. (by Cassie) ===

=== **Meanwhile, the police came out from Mrs. Brown house and started to find Rocky in all over the city.While Mrs. Brown decided to make poster of her missing cat, which could help her to find rocky as soon as possible. A minute ago the policemen call Mrs. Brown because someone saw a cat with bright tempting blue eyes near in the supermarket. So Mrs. Brown drives to police station excitedly. When she reaches the police station, Mrs. Brown saw the cat with the bright tempting blue eyes, but sadly the cat is not rocky because it doesn’t have a white fur like a snow. Then Mrs. Brown started to cry and went home worriedly. (by Remar)** ===

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Now it's your time to continue the story by writing the 4th paragraph. You will start writing this on Tue,23/08/11 and don't forget to prepare for assessment task on Thursday as well. By the end of Week 6, I would like to see everyone's paragraph here and I'm sure you folks will do an excellent job again! One suggestion, to check your spelling, it's better to write in WORD then copy paste to here. If you find other's mistakes, could you highlight them by adding the background colour. Last, please do not choose Heading 1 and 2 for your writing, instead, use Heading 3 to write.Good luck and have fun!=

= The second round of paragraph writing has started. Based on the 2nd paragraph created by Cassie, now it's your turn to write the 3rd paragraph. Remeber! The focus of this story is the cat (from the title) and it shouldn't be found so soon, Otherwise, he won't be a missing cat anymore. So a hint for you to write paragraph 3: imagining where and what the cat is doing or any interesting or terrible things that might have happened to this cat? You might want to use first person (the missing cat) to tell the story. Good luck and don't miss the deadline, which is Monday, Week 2. =

<span style="color: #0eb90e; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 130%;">When you are reading this message, I'm probably sitting in one of the seminars at the conference. However, I'm thinking about all of you. Don't forget what I said and be good and make me proud as always \(*^^*)/. Help your classmates if they are not sure how to edit the page. When you finish writing the 2 nd paragraph for today's lesson, copy from the WORD and paste it on the page. Do not always change the page by adding small thing. I'll also have a look at the page later. As I've mentioned again and again, NEVER DELETE OR CHANGE ANYTHING WRITTEN BY OTHERS! YOU CAN ONLY HIGHLIGHT THE MISTAKES. Enjoy the MS CHEN FREE DAY and don't miss me too much!

3rd paragraph by Qixun Huang The policeman knows that Mrs. Brown is a lonely person. She was so sad about her baby cat which has been missing for a month. He writes up the information that Mrs. Brown had given. The policeman tries very hard to find her kitten. After a few days, he still could not find him. He is worried Mrs. Brown is too sad about the cat, so he makes a decision: buy a cat that looks like Mrs. Brown’s cat, in that way she will not be very sad. When Mrs. Brown sees the cat, she holds the cat tightly. Maybe Mrs.Brown is scared the cat will leave her again if she lets him go. Anyway, now the missing cat is hiding near the rubbish bin, because some naughty guys were chasing him. His body is exuding a very foul smell and so dirty. M issing cat is looking for someone to save him because he was miss es Mrs. Brown and is so hungry ……

3rd paragraph by xiumin

The policesympathetically with mrs brown and said:" Your kitten haven't been found. It may have died." "But we will do over best to help you to find it." policeman said to mrs brown. Mrs brown said to policemen" thank you." but at long last,have were no news about where abouts rocky. However, Mrs brown felt very desperate and said: my son, come back, i need you," Mrs brown said. And ......

3rd paragraph by Cassie -
Meanwhile, Rocky was not in the dark streets, and in bins, as Mrs Brown thought. He was walking in green misty mountains covered with flowers. When Rocky went missing, he was playing in the park, where he saw a rotund fat mouse and he ran after the mouse to catch it. However, when the mouse suddenly ran into a hollow tree, Rocky desperately rushed to catch the mouse, but he did not know that the hole in the tree led into a deep hole inside the tree.he fell so far,so fast and he felt dizzy. After a while, Rocky slowly opened his eyes, and to be surprise, he was in beautiful mountainous forests with flowers blooming luxuriously, while the sun was shining on the grass and the butterflies were flying between the flowers. Just as in wonderland, Rocky kept walking behind a tree and he saw a lake of clear water, with shiny fish swimming in it. Rocky felt that he was in paradise, and that was a dream...

3rd paragraph by Jingjing
==**Shortly after the police went out,"At any cost, i want to find my lost baby" Mrs. Brown told herself. Next month Mrs.Brown went out and looking for the cat with her friends. One day, the villagers said Mrs.Brown's cat in a battered the lane. " It's a news which make me very exciting " Mrs.Brown said. When she saw her beloved cat, happiness surrounded her.However Mrs.Brow did not know** the cat was born.==

=<span style="color: #1b8005; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif; font-size: 110%;">3rd paragraph by Remar = ===**Meanwhile, the police came out from Mrs. Brown house and started to find Rocky in all over the city.While Mrs. Brown decided to make poster of her missing cat, which could help her to find rocky as soon as possible. A minute ago the policemen call Mrs. Brown because someone saw a cat with bright tempting blue eyes near in the supermarket. So Mrs. Brown drives to police station excitedly. When she reaches the police station, Mrs. Brown saw the cat with the bright tempting blue eyes, but sadly the cat is not rocky because it doesn’t have a white fur like a snow. Then Mrs. Brown started to cry and went home worriedly.**===

**<span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">After the police got the information from Mrs .Brown ,he planned to go back home immediately and find more information about Mrs. Brown’s cat <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">On the way home he was thinking about the event over and over then found that there are something wrong in this event <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">.“ <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">The cat has been living with Mr. Brown for over 7 years <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">， <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">stands for this reason the cat shouldn’t get lost on the way, ****<span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">”the <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">police man talked to him self. “ <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Therefore there must be some other reasons, <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">”thought the police man. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">At the time he passed over the garden of Mr. Browns’ <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">， <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">He found some foot prints that similar to a cat and a person <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">he felt weird then kept looking for the clue near the place <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Finally he found a business card with the name Mr. Tom and the contact number to the company <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">For only unusual is that it didn’t mention about companys' name <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Thereupon the police man suspected that is an illegal group focusing on catching animals <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Then the police man went home and pretended to be a customerand and called the company <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">As expected <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">， <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">it’s really an illegal group and their work is to illegally kidnapping pets from people then sell it in a high price <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">The police man got the address from the person on the phone then tried to make it into an action on the next morning <span style="color: black; font-family: 宋体;">. **
 * 3rd paragraph by Feng Huang**

3rd paragraph by Jim After the police got the information about the cat from Mrs. Brown, then the police went back to the police station and tell his work-mate to help him. The police search the streets that near Mrs. Brown's house. After few day, Mrs. Brown hear someone was knocking on her door, then she open the door very quickly, when she open the door, she see a police holding her dog, she is so exciting on that time. But suddenly a alarm ring, everything in front of Mrs. Brown's eyes are all disappear, everything is not true, it's just Mrs. Brown's dream.

===At the meantime, Rocky is lying behind a big tree which is in the park. His blue eyes was bestrewing with tired and his beautiful white fur wasn’t like snow anymore, now it’s dirty and smelly. Rocky closed his eyes, missing about delicious food, warm home, and his owner--Mrs. Brown.===

= 2nd paragraph by Achiech Nhail = =<span style="color: #20b6c5; font-family: 'Calibri','sans-serif'; font-size: 15px;">Mrs Brown had gone 1 month without Rocky, and felt lost and lonely. Mrs Brown was waiting for the police when the doorbell rang. She got out of her chair immediately and walked to the door very slowly since she’s very old “please be Rocky please be good news” When she opened the door, she didn’t see the police she didn’t even see Rocky, she saw a little boy with beautiful blue eyes, just like Rocky’s she said to herself, the little boy had cookies, would you like some of my cookies, yes I’ll take a box Mrs brown said come on in. The little boy sat down and waited for Mrs brown. =

=2nd paragraph Jim= =When the policeman come and Mrs. Brow her to describe the cat, she told the policeman that the cat loves to cuddle and play., If I come in the house after walking in the yard with no shoes he will lick my toes. He always tries to open the doors but cant, Mrs. Brown then told the policeman that the cat had beautiful green eyes, and hairy.=

=2nd paragraph by Kech=

since the missing of rocky Mrs Brown has being happy
2nd paragraph by Dong = Than the policeman come to Mrs Brown’s house and ask h er about the cat and then the policeman go to fine the cat but police want to go to toilet first. Policeman goes around city but can’t fine the cat. Police tell Mrs Brow “I can’t fine the cat” Mrs Brow very sad and one day ago Mrs Brown went to the shopping mall.=

=2nd Paragraph by Steven= =**<span style="color: #002060; font-family: 'Calibri','sans-serif';">The feelings that were going ****<span style="color: red; font-family: 'Calibri','sans-serif';">through ****<span style="color: #002060; font-family: 'Calibri','sans-serif';"> her mind could not be explained, because Rocky was given to her by her husband before he passed away. So this was the last thing she would want to lose. A couple of rings later senior constable Simon picks up the phone “hello welcome to Wayville police station this is Simon speaking ” but there was no answer from Mrs Brown. “Hello anyone there” repeated by senior Constable Simon. After a couple of minutes finally Mrs Brown answer back to Senior Constable Simon. What is the problem this afternoon Simon asked? With her sad and distressed voice Mrs Brown explained the problem. While she was on the phone there was a loud sound coming from the kitchen, “could this be Rocky”? Miss Brown asked her Self. She hung up and walked through the corridor and into the kitchen to investigate. **=

= 2nd paragraph by Hesen Zhang = =<span style="background-color: #e3e765; color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif; font-size: 16px;">The Mrs Brown to call the police tells them, police come in. <span style="background-color: #d8d264; color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif; font-size: 16px;"> Said that, when you cat missing? <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif;"> The Mrs Brown is very sad, sit on the chair of few hours. From the 9AM to 12 PM, Mrs Brown didn’t say a word. <span style="background-color: #ddd55f; color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif; font-size: 16px;">Because she is think, why is missing for rocky? <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif;">Even blame themselves. Do not take good care of it. So, she went to the police man, hope can help her to find the rocky. Police asked her, <span style="background-color: #d8d27d; color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif; font-size: 16px;">what look like of your cat? <span style="background-color: #d5c853; color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif; font-size: 16px;">It is has <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif;"> a blue eyes and sharp of paw. After few days, <span style="background-color: #e3cd82; color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif; font-size: 16px;">police told to him <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif;">. Someone has seen a little cat, just like you rocky. The Mrs Brown is so happy. = =<span style="background-color: #0000ff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Calibri,sans-serif;">3rd paragraph by Hesen Zhang = = =   The policeman started found of rocky, that is a difficult work. Has blue eyes and white of fur, all cats has this characteristics. From the one week, the Mrs. Brown has seemed the cats of so many. But, they are not rocky, she was very <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 15px;">disappointed.and sad. She can only wait for news, after few days, the policeman has not found the rocky, they can only lie to her. The rocky is died, mrs.brown can’t believe and cries. Said that. NO! My baby, I hope you come back, I can’t lose you! The police are self-blame, continue to found the rocky, hope can found!

=2nd pargraph by Selina= ==== Mrs Brown was worried about Rocky. When the doorbell rang, the 56-year-old lady walked to the door slowly and curious about whom was out there. When she opens the door, she saw a policeman standing behind the door. “Thanks God you’re here,” she said, “My cat Rocky has lost more than a month.” Mrs Brown said it urgently. “I want my baby home,” she cried. The policeman asked her to describe how Rocky looks like. “Rocky had a <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; line-height: 115%;">sleek -looking, a narrow, thick face with a <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; line-height: 115%;">flashing green-eyes <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; line-height: 115%;">and a pert nose.” She replied. “ What colour fur has he got?” The policeman asked. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; line-height: 115%;">“Rocky has soft fur, dainty paws and a rhythmic thumping tail.” Mrs Brown said. “I would do my best to find Rocky,” said the policeman. ====

=2nd paragraph by Laurent= ====The policeman came to her house, asked her to describe how the cat was, she told him that had beautiful green eyes,had all his teeth but missing half of his left ear,the cat was seven years of age and completly white."The cat was about a foot high",said Mrs.Brown.==== =3rd Paragraph by Laurent=

around the city or put up flyers"replied the police.
=<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 16px;">Second paragraph of our story "A Missing Cat"-By Eric = = = =<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 16px;">After Mrs Brown called the police, the police soon arrive to Mrs Brown’s house. “You got to find my baby!” cried Mrs Brown. “ Calm down, Mrs Brown. First you need to describe Rocky, and then we can help you to find him.” said the police. “Well, Rocky have a pair of blue eyes, and his body is cover with complete white fur." said Mrs Brown. “Is Rocky your child or your pet?” the police question Mrs Brown. “Rocky is my lovely cat.” Mrs Brown replied. “Well Mrs Brown, we only find missing persons, not PETS!” said the police. “But you are a police, doesn’t police help people?” Mrs Brown asks back. “You can put up some photos of Rocky around this area, or ask your neighbors.” the police replied. Mrs Brown is despondent and sad, she doesn’t know what to do next or who can help her. = = = =<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Third paragraph of our story "A Missing Cat" = =<span style="background: white; color: black; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 16px; font-weight: normal;">Mrs Brown is despondent and sad, she doesn't know what to do next or who else can help her. Mrs Brown went for a walk at the Blue Lake, where she and her cat Rocky use to play in there. This place is full of memorable memory for both of them. As Mrs Brown walking along the lake, she could not stop herself from crying, because she misses Rocky so much that Mrs Brown would do anything to get Rocky back. Meanwhile, a boy went up to Mrs Brown and ask "Hello, are you alright?" "No! My cat is missing!" cried Mrs Brown. "A cat? I just saw one no long ago" The boy answered. = <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 16px;">(IS THAT ROCKY?)

third paragraph of our story a missing cat by PASCAL
The police wrote all details given by Mirs. Brown.can you show us rocky's photo? the police asked. Mrs.brown went in her room with sadness she grabbed her big album plenty of her and her lovely photos.She brought it to the police men and say<< promise me if you will bring my rocky back .>>the police replayed don't worry Mrs.brown,calm down your pet will be found. Now we are going to help you and if you hear about where he is let us know. The police left Mrs. brown's house to continue their jobs; but they had no idea where to found brown's pet. they were thinking may be he is stolen or naughty dids killed him. The police put up rocky'photo a round the city asked if has someone saw him;but no body called the police or say about Brown's pet Rocky.

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<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 110%; line-height: normal;">**And then Mrs. Brown went to the shopping mall and she saw a many cat on the street the cat look very sad and Mrs. Brown sad “oh pool little cat" and she going to buy something’s for a house to eat . Mrs. Brown go back home and think she will take the cat on the take the cat on the street come to live with her and then she goanna sleep but she can't sleep well because miss the cat she dream her cat is in the garden and tomorrow she will go to see in garden****.** ======

Ok guys, sorry for the late reply. Not because I am just having fun in Darwin, I am actually very busy and feeling tired everyday here. However, the weather is perfect, warm and sunny. The beach is just beyond the imagination. CBD is quite small and they don't have Myer or David Jones plus other shops that we have in Adelaide. I really miss my home and Adelaide. As I promised, I have taken some pictures and upload here for you to have a look. Also, some students like Dong, Selina and Jim, if you haven't finished your writing, Friday is the last chance. Laurent, you need to write bit more as well. Good job to the rest, during the holiday please read others' work and highlight the mistakes they have made. I have found a lot already but I need you to point out for other people. Last but not least, have a safe and happy school holiday! Ms Chen from Darwin = = == == == ==


 * =Enviously Boy= ||

The school once had a student who was different to the others, his name called Dong. Dong seemed to be a perfect guy and very handsome.

He was cute and smart that many girls fell in love with him. Dong was popular in the girls group.

Dong had a friend called Jim, but Jim didn’t like Dong much because Dong was handsome and smarter than Jim. Jim likes to annoy Dong

One day Dong bought some food in the canteen. He carried pasta. Then Jim went to push Dong in a back, causing him drop the pasta on the floor

“Why did you push me?” Dong asked.

“Because you grab all of the girls I had from me!” Jim said.

The next day during the lunch time Jim hid a weapon in Dong’s bag. And he had some bad luck because the teacher came to watch his bag. Then the teacher found the knife. The teacher called the police to come to catch dong.

“This is not my knife!” Dong rejected but he very lucky because in that room was a CCTV. The police watched it and soon found Jim.

Now everyone knew that Jim put this knife in Dong bag.

Jim gets in big trouble.

“I’m sorry. I will not do it again! “Jim said.

“It is alright, I accept your apology” Dong said.

And then Jim became Dong’s best friend. By Dong